Mabus strolled through the courtyard behind his Ziggurat Palace admiring the green plants and colorful flowers. Their delicious fragrance reminded him so much of the Hanging Gardens of Babylon. He plucked a leafy flower to sniff its multi-colored petals. Relishing its fresh scent, he ignored the wilting stem. He entered a private cemetery. Walking past the small tombstones that marked his failures, he whispered, “Why did the flowers have to die?”
His mind wandered to the distant past, recalling the horrific fate of his wife and five children. A heinous act the aliens made him watch. His enemies offered to spare his young heirs, if he agreed to relinquish his kingdom. Mabus declined and his adversaries showed no mercy. One by one they dismembered his family. Even as his children’s cries tormented his ears and their warm blood splattered his anguished face, he refused to concede.
The atrocious memory remained lodged in his soul like an annoying nail hammered into his skull. The ultimate sacrifice saved the kingdom and the planet Sumer. Now, thousands of years later here on Earth, he refused to permit the human epidemic to contaminate his conquest. He needed to protect his people and the children from the violent humans full of intolerance and hate. The revolting species must be eliminated.
Grounding the little flower in his powerful hand, Mabus walked away, vowing to protect his community as the waning cries of his children echoed in his recollection.
– Mabus is the antagonist in my novel/screenplay trilogy Paradox
An antagonist with real anger in his core. I like the way you have introduced your characters.
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Thanks for visiting my blog and thanks for commenting. I wasn’t sure what I wanted to do with this page then I had a sudden inspiration. I will be adding more characters in the near future.
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Mabus sounds like a formidable character who is loyal t his kingdom, putting it before his family. You’ve peaked my with this snippet.
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Thank you so much.
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you are welcome…
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Thank you for the compliment. It means so much to me. It will be a pleasure following your blog. Hope to spend more time exchanging ideas with you. Thanks again.
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You are welcome and I am with you – it will be fun exchanging ideas and reading more of your work!
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Powerful piece. Kind of character that grabs and holds my attention. This is a well written post – not only does it gives us insight to Mabus – but to his creator’s skill as well.
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Oh, thank you so much. A villain needs to have strong reasons and motivations. I worry about this character. Thanks for the comment.
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very powerful post and your imagination and weaving words into a good post is remarkable ——–peace and blessings 🙂
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Thanks so much. You are so kind.
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Imagining all this while reading was like watching the trailer of a movie.
But when a book becomes a movie,the story is ruined ( mostly(.
Keep writing!
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I agree with you. Hollywood does ruin many books. Thanks for the comment. It gives me hope. If you have a chance, please read my poem from Wednesday, “for so long.”
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Stay hopey!
Link,please?
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https://thelonelyauthorblog.wordpress.com/2015/11/03/for-so-long/
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Don’t know if I could have been as resolute had it been my family. Is that lack of passion … or highly intense passion that gives a man the fortitude to live through times of torment and stick to his values …? Interesting write, definitely makes me want to know Mabus more.
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Thanks. No one know what they are capable of until that moment arrives. To defend you and yours, you may do things you never imagined.
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So are you sure you won’t self publish? Because I’d really like to read the rest!
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Thanks for reading my characters Meg I am still sending out queries. I guess I would turn to self publishing in the future if all else fails. My 2016 plan is query agents, enter the screenplays in contests. Query Hollywood agents as well. It will be a full marketing assault. We will see what happens. Thanks for the encourgement.
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You are most welcome! I’m cheering for you all the way!
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Thanks. So, I am not lonely anymore. lol
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Not at all! And neither am I! 😀
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Smiling
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Sounds like a character who puts duty before love… a reverse mark anthony if you will :p
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Thank for reading. I appreciate that. He is an evil SOB
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Savior of Britain? 😛 Just kidding… You know someone’s hero could just as well be another person’s villain…
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Never really thought of it, but that is so true. Even Hitler was a hero for his people at one time.
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Gets better and better.
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Thank you for reading.
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My pleasure.
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