Every man has that one unforgettable woman that will haunt him until his final day; the girl that got away. Allie detested television, vanilla ice cream, and missionary. She explored the depths of her sexuality; while I discovered the heights of my pain. My muse had a nickname. I called her Devil Girl. I write these words to ease my sorrows. My name is Andrew.
This is our story.
weeks after the Pandora episode
I found a message upon my desk
the card contained her sweet scent
her note mentioned a time and place
it contained simple instructions
watch, follow, you don’t know me
I don’t know you
the rules seemed simple enough
hours later I stood in the crowded train station
she was nowhere to be found
a slight parting of the mob
revealed my darling angel
my heart jack hammered against my ribs
she wore a sheer white blouse
that revealed her bra silhouette
a short beige skater skirt
beige high heels that looked well standing up
and just as sweet in the air
reaching for the stars
knowing Allie, panties were optional
the men around her stole discreet glances
what a silly game she played
a subway slowly pulled into the station
bringing a slight breeze with it
my throat went desert dry
her fluttering skirt defied gravity
revealing her perverted plans and more
what are you doing Devil Girl
To be continued next Saturday
Yea kya story hai bhaisaab!!!
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Okay. Thanks for stopping by.
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Sounds like trouble to me!
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Hahaha. Almost anything on a NYC subway is trouble. Although nowadays people are plugged into their headphones. Would anyone even notice? Doubt it. Thanks for stopping by to read.
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That’s true!
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Amazing writing. I hope it’s all true; can’t get to heaven without a Devil Girl.
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Hahaha. Love your comment. She took me to heaven all the time. Oh, Man. Thanks for stopping by to read. I appreciate it. Take care.
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Love notes. Allie seems to know how to play it well 😉
I enjoyed this and cant wait to read the next one!
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That girl had a creative imagination when it came to sex. Thank you so much for stopping by to read and comment. I appreciate it. Take care.
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Ooerr…!
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Hahaha. Thanks for stopping by to read.
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😉
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Please don’t make me wait. More. Now! 😃
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LOL Sorry. Thanks for stopping by to read.
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😦 I’ll be back next week.
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Sorry. Hope you are well.
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NO! I’m NOT well. You keep giving me these little snippets of pure deliciousness and then tell me I have to wait another week before I can have another taste when all I want to do is be glutinous and devour it all NOW. 😉
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Hahaha Thanks for saying that. At least one person is reading it. I really appreciate it.
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Well, I DON’T! 😉
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😉
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Although your writing is creative and filled with passion (as well as other emotions,) I have encountered this type of scene countless times originally living in NY. Those living outside NY that may choose to visit would be amazed by the self restrain most New Yorker’s display.
Your nail biting, page turner approach to this epic leaves your readers wanting more. This is the sign of excellence. Well done.
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Thank you so much. This scene happens in NY all the time. Thanks for stopping by.
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Great writing! You have the suspense nailed.
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Robyn, thanks so much for saying that. I really appreciate it. Also, appreciate you stopping by to read. Have a great evening.
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Lunchtime here but thanks anyway. Its hot and humid and we’re expecting a storm which might clear the air a little.
I notice fewer adjectives in your writing which is ‘tighter’ now. Keep it up!
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Hahaha. Thanks for that. That time when you mentioned it I thought oh crap. My novels are tight, then I just slapped together a sloppy post about the novel,. Bad mistake. If a literary agent were to stop by I torpedoed my efforts. I am more careful about my posts. Thanks. And thanks for stopping by to read. I appreciate it. Take care. I hope it cools off. Smile.
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Good evening my friend. I find myself unable to resist commenting on your posts! Did you have contact with Allie in those weeks since the Pandora encounter? Or was this the first time? Isn’t scent such a powerful draw? Her scent on the note… They say the sense of smell is our most primitive. I find certain scents positively intoxicating. Waiting for next week!
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Meg you make me laugh. When that Pandora encounter occurred I was uncomfortable with Allie for weeks. It just isn’t my thing. We were together for less than 9 months and at that stage we should concentrate on us not bringing in a third party. Now, I realize how stupid I was to agree to everything. But I am a man. With that I said it all, huh? Maybe I should do a post, The Top Ten Stupid Things Men Do When They Are In Love. Yes, scent is the strongest of all. Coco Chanel makes me melt like butter. Meg, thanks so much for stopping by. I am actually trying to formulate this into novel form. First draft of the early chapters are complete. Have a wonderful evening.
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Trust me, women do some equally stupid things when they are in love! (Speaking from experience). You have a wonderful evening, too!
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LOL Thanks
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Sigh…a great read to begin a Sunday morning 🙂
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Nice. Thanks for stopping by to read. I really appreciate it. Happy Sunday.
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You are a poet. I want to tattoo this onto my arm “[She] detested television, vanilla ice cream, and missionary.” and this on my back “She explored the depths of her sexuality; while I discovered the heights of my pain”. I wont- but I want to.
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Omg You like it that much? Thanks for saying that. She really hated those things. Hey, thanks for stopping by to read and comment. I really appreciate it.
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Good Morning! I hope you like awards because I´ve nominated you for The Versatile Blogger Award. You can check the rules in my post 🙂 https://chapeblog.wordpress.com/2015/11/29/the-versatile-blogger-award/
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Good morning, hope you are doing well. Thanks for thinking of me, but I am trying to keep my page award free. Maybe you didn’t notice it, but I do have a widget on my home page that indicates that. I do not give or accept awards. I am tied up marketing my works to literary agents, between that blogging, and writing my next novel I am very short on time. Thus, I shy away from the awards. Thanks so very much for thinking of me. I am flattered. Have a great day. Best wishes to you and yours.
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Sorry, my bad. I didn´t notice. Actually I found the first widget not accepting awards in another blog, after I´d nominated you. I need to be more careful with my nominations. It will not happen again but I appreciate your continued support and enjoy your blog. you give me a hint with “next novel”, I will search the previous 🙂 Have a great week ahead and best wishes too 🙂
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Oh, don’t worry. I am flattered. Blogging is eating away so much time, it is keeping me from the things I am trying to accomplish. I will be stopping by your blog to get some tips. Thanks for thinking of me.
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Thank you for your kindness 🙂 Keep focus, we want to read that new novel! I´ll try to post some good fitness tips 🙂 Big hug, David
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Thanks. I want to learn about exercises I can do while sitting., I have had two surgeries this year and I need to keep burning calories. So. I will follow and be in touch. Thanks.
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Noted! I will prepare a good post and an easy workout 🙂 Thanks for the inspiration!
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Oh,, thank you. Actually, that would be a great post for your blog. Wouldn’t it? Exercises for people with some mobility impairment. Right now, I am under restrictions of not carrying anything over two pounds. I imagine you will suggest stretching. But I will leave that up to you. I will follow closely and learn. Thanks so much.
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You are right! You suggested me a great post. I need this kind of inspiration, a real case. Internet is full of info but I´m happy to add my point of view. Posting about my workouts… I don´t know, what´s the point? 🙂 It´s my pleasure to help others. This life is all about feelings, you know? Big hug, David
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I am on your page right now. Reading the dietary section. Great posts. Also, followed you on twitter. Thanks so much. -Andrew
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Now, I´m flattered! I follow back 🙂 Nice to meet you, big hug – David
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Thanks David. I write about writing, creativity, and humor, but your blog is truly important. People taking care of their bodies and health. I admire what you do. Keep up the good work.
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Thank you so much!! I only do “my thing” it´s not a big deal 🙂 I have injuries and they suc…. hurt 🙂
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LOL Yeah, but look at your suggestion. My doc has told me to walk and watch my diet. And too avoid weights. I could swim like you suggested. He could have told me that. I am so happy I found your blog.
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Yes, you can swim. But careful, not any swimming style is adecuate for any injury. Please, wait. It will be easier to explain with pics 🙂 I´m happy to help!
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Thanks. I am patient. 🙂
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hehe, thank you 🙂
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Loved the writing but have you been eating oysters or taking the extra dose of Cialis? 🙂
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Oh, no. It is not creative imagination. In the famous words of Lady Gaga, (another profound philosopher much like myself) she’s a freak b*tch baby. Ex’s make wonderful fodder for writing ideas. lol
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Well, lucky you!!
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What is the old saying, Behind every crazy b*tch there is an exhausted frightened man. lol
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Ha, ha, ha!
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Seriously, everything I have written so far, happened. I want to add an episode of her meeting the parents, but that one will be complete fiction because that never happened.
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She doesn’t sound like a ‘meeting the parents’ kind of girl…
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DEFINITELY NOT. Mom with her Christian beliefs would have croaked.
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😉
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Ugh! Always making us wait. Oh well, just another 8640 minutes (give or take). It’s only time 🙂
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Hahaha. Thanks for stopping by to read ad comment. I appreciate it.
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I love the visuals I have of this story in my head.
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Thank you for saying that. I try to imply in order not to be vulgar or raunchy. Thank you for reading this and taking the time out to comment. Your comment made me happy. Thanks again and take care.
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The continued adventures bring a smile. I particularly enjoyed this line “and just as sweet in the air “. Oh the visuals you conjured up. More please. Smiles.
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LOL Thank you so much. I try to not be raunchy or vulgar. No need to, your imagination works just fine. Honestly, I did enjoy that line myself. Next Saturday. And these are true life experiences I had in the late 90s until 2006. Thanks for stopping by to read and comment. I appreciate it. Take care. I am awaiting your next post.
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I had a few over the last few days. Smiles. I know what you mean about writing that way and I think you do it perfectly. Just enough is said.
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Thanks
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My pleasure.
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You remind me of a friend dear to me. A special woman who I met here in the blog world. She hasn’t been around much. Miss talking to her. You take care. We will chatting more. Wink.
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Indeed. Smiles. Winks back.
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Good morning 🙂 A couple of things you can do in the swimming pool 🙂 https://chapeblog.wordpress.com/2015/11/30/multipurpose-pool/ I took for granted a lower back injury, maybe it´s not your case but sure there are specific exercises for any injury 😉
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Thank you so much.
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🙂
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Reblogged this on Ancien Hippie.
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Thanks again Penney. Appreciate it.
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The visuals and imagery in this story are amazing! I can’t wait to read what happens next. 🙂
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Thanks so much. I am happy you like it. Thanks for stopping by to read. Any new posts for you?
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Yes, I got a new poem up. Check it out. 🙂
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Devil Girl knows exactly what she is doing.. Smiles
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And I the loyal lap dog following all her craziness.
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Laughing!!! Of course you did.
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Men = IDIOTS. But I am sure you already know that. Know the difference between me and the others of my sex? I know how to appreciate and treasure a good thing. Good women no longer grow on trees.
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I am sure you’re one of the few, who is not an idiot. The same goes for men. There are a few good rare ones left in this world I’m sure. You seem to be one of them. Smiles.
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You made me blush. My cheeks are flaming. When I buried my parents I vowed to respect and appreciate the people in my life. That includes you me dear friend.
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You’re too kind. Thank you.
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so graphically written… so brilliant and delicious image… 😊🌹
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Hehe Thanks
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