Yesterday, I read an incredible poem, that started a painful conversation with its author. I was so affected by our chat, I sighed off of my blog earlier than usual.
Sorry, my writing doesn’t match her power or emotion. This humble poem is dedicated to everyone who lost a loved one.
Chrissy this is for you.
One More Time
My life without you
was never meant to be
a planet so barren
it’s lacking symmetry
my arms yearning
to hold you tight
dreaming of the day
I find you in the light
you will never know
my life devoid of rhyme
Or the treasures I would give
to hold you one more time
Here is the link to the writing that inspired our conversation
https://christinastrigas.wordpress.com/2015/12/02/misunderstand-me/
Reblogged this on Livedinitaly's Blog and commented:
Beautiful
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Thank you so much. I am flattered.
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Soulfully touching
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Thanks
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Excellent effort…..in response to Chrissie’s poem. Powerful writing by both of you….Thanks for the link. Very moving piece, by Chrissie.
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Thanks for stopping by to read. She is a powerful writer.
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Thank You for sharing this poeerful piece.
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Thank you for stopping by to read.
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Both deeply touching and inspirational in their different ways. For me, yours has a directness – a kind of cleanliness – that I like.
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Yeah, I tend to write more direct. Chrissy writes with symbolism and imagery that I admire. Thanks for stopping by to read.
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Your poem resonates with me. Since I lost my wife I’ve said many times that I’d give treasures to hold her once more.. Life is often just time devoted to wishing it was my time to be with her again.
xxx Huge Hugs xxx
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Thank you so much for your kind words David. I spend my time thinking of my parents and wanting to do it all again just one more time. Again, thanks so much. You have been a great supporter. Thanks for the retweets. I am still learning my way around twitter.
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This is beautiful…so touched to have inspired you to write this. From the bottom of my heart thank you for sharing this.
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Thanks. Chrissy we will laugh about this when you introduce me to them on the other side of the light. Take care.
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I’m trying to always reach them. Thank you. You too, take care. x
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The part about lacking symmetry, doesn’t everything feel off, out of balance when someone goes missing from your life? I felt like that when I lost my Dad. Nothing was right in the world. It’s a beautiful poem to express such a deeply sad emotion. Chrissy’s poem, too. Thanks for sharing it and being inspired. xo
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Thanks Meg. Yeah, its as if we bury a part of us, too. I almost used that line, but I found it kind of cold. Thanks for stopping by. Sorry about your Dad. There never seems to be enough time.
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heart touching poem
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Thanks for reading
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Nice, when one piece can inspire another. Well done.
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Thanks for stopping by. There are so many bloggers that inspire me. What a wonderful platform to network.
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Absolutely!
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So beautiful and touching
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Thanks
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Welcome 😊
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Soulful poetic expression,striking image with emotive compositional elements.
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Thank you.
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My pleasure.
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This is an AMAZING poem! Don’t sell yourself short!
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Aw thanks. I don’t know about amazing. It came from my lonely heart. Seriously, the loss of a loved one can be so painful. I wanted to let my friend know others felt the same pain. Perhaps that would bring some comfort. Thanks for stopping by to read and comment. I appreciate that.
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I actually wrote a poem about missing my Grandma this morning before I even read yours. Maybe I’ll post it on my blog…we’ll see.
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Let me know if you post it. i’d love to read it.
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Okay. I think I’m going to keep it private, but I’ll let you know.
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Oh, ok. I understand these personal thoughts are not easy to express in public.
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Yeah. It’s not so much that, I just feel like it’s something that should be between my family and I. I dunno.
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No problem. You not ready to post your stuff out there. There ia almost an exhibitionist feel to doing that. To expose your work like that is not easy.
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Thanks. It’s weird, I think some stuff is okay to put out there and other stuff should be more intimate.
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True. I understand.
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Have you ever checked out the blog World of Horror? It’s great!
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NO, I haven’t. Do you have the link?
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https://amirhoseinghazi.wordpress.com/
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Thanks for the link. I will indulge myself.
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Its beautiful and touching. At times after a person is gone we realize how badly we miss them.
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Yeah, and we think about the wasted moments we wish we could have back. Thanks for stoping by to read. I appreciate it.
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Reblogged this on ' Ace Friends News ' and commented:
Wonderful poem Andrew and posted your friend Chrissys post as compliment to you and her great work, your best just got better 🌟
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THanks you so much Ian. Her pain touched me so. Thanks so much
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I can understand why my friend poetry is pain and pain creates a greater writer like you Ian
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Thanks you with such a wonderful compliment. I appreciate it.
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I’m deeplt touched by writing. Thanks for sharing.
Have a great day!
Arcane owl
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Thank you arcane Owl. And thanks for stopping by to read. Have a good day.
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Lovely.
And thank you for the link. You were inspired by a beautiful poem.
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Chrissy is a powerful writer. Glad you enjoyed. Thanks for stopping by to read.
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Just in case I hadn’t been clear, I quite enjoyed your poem, as well.
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Thanks so much.
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Tenderly beautiful …Chrissy is a favorite poet of mine …..thankyou , love , megxxx
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One of my favorite too. Thanks for stopping by.
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yeah.i enjoy n become happy by knowing dis dat u have felt deeply of meaning of love n missing beloved.thanks to crissy.
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Yes. Most important thin is our family. And when we lose them it is so sad. Thanks for reading.
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SIR Lonely Author, a title I bestow on you for remarkable writing! (I’ve never filled in for a queen before.) The two of you have written dueling poetry. Powerful, dramatic and filled with painful emotions many of us can find deep within our souls. It is hard to believe the level of quality the two of you offer. Stay motivated and passionate about your craft. The work you produce adds real quality to all of our lives. Thank you.
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LOL Thank yuo so muck for your kind words.Sir?? Can.t stop laughing. I will. Thanks for the encouragement.
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Encouraging for those of us who are left.
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Thanks for reading. Lossing a loved one is tough. Probably the toughest lesson we have to learn in life.
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A really heartfelt poem.
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Thanks for reading.
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Thanks so much. You are too kind.
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It was in the way you started it, it was in the way you made me remember the things I had buried within .. I wish someday I will be able to write my emotions more expressively. I could only write a poem named ‘can’t make myself’. Ha-ha. Even the title says it all. Thank you truly for sharing this.
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You’re welcome. Wow, I had to reread this poem. I had forgotten all about it. Thanks for reading it. I am happy in touched you. Can you send me the link to “Can’t Make Myself.” I would love to read it.
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http://wp.me/p5VbDD-d
Here’s the link. I hope this works.
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Yes, it worked. Tell me what you don’t like about your own work? I commented on the piece. Thanks for sharing.
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I replied there.
You have captured the essence in a few words about this, whereas I couldn’t even convince myself I did a good job after trying two different approaches on the same.
Alas, I am not yet that open, not yet expressive enough.
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Between us, I hate most of my poems. I hate that they rhyme. But I can never write one without rhyming. There are little things you can do to make writing more interesting to read. The first rule of writing is SHOW not Tell. Look at this piece, I wrote it about a friend’s loss. I recalled lossing my own parents to get in the mood. I remember feeling empty. But why say (tell) empty when you can describe it as “a planet so barren it’s lacking symmetry.” That little phrase paints a picture of a dark cold world. Do you see what I mean? Those kind of descriptions adds power and emotion. Does that help?
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Between us, I love that your poems rhyme. I always had a soft corner for those kind of poetries.
Yes, I do see what you mean. At least I think so.
Thank you for taking time out to reply to my messages and reading my feeble attempts at poetry.
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Please, don’t say feeble. Much too hard on yourself. Have you been writing for a long time?
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I started my blog in March. But I had been trying my hand at poetry before that, for friends and birthdays.
What about you ?
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I serious started writing poetry this past October. My first serious poem was “For So Long.” But I have been working on manuscripts and screenplays for several years.
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Oh! That’s wonderful !!!
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Thanks.
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