Every man has that one unforgettable woman that will haunt him until his final day; the girl that got away. Allie detested television, vanilla ice cream, and missionary. She explored the depths of her sexuality; while I discovered the heights of my pain. My muse had a nickname. I called her Devil Girl. I write these words to ease my sorrows. My name is Andrew.
This is our story.
the train pulled out of the station
darkness replaced the light of my life
I had to return to find Allie
frantic, I got off at the next station
heart banging against my ribs
hopped on the next train back
Times Square
a complicated labyrinth of tunnels
and advertising filled passages
turned me into The Maze Runner
She wasn’t here, she wasn’t there
my imagination got the best of me
their bodies writhing, sweating
mouths kisses. moaning, panting
in the tub
against the wall
hanging from the hotel chandelier
I searched every crack and crevice
she must have exited with the construction brute
flew past the turnstile
into the jungle of lights, noise, and throng
I spotted her blonde mane in the crowd
ran after her accompanied by desperation
pushing through the masses
reached for her elbow
a strange face greeted me
with a sinking heart I apologized
I lost my Devil Girl
To be continued.
Very good imagery!
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Thanks. How are you?
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I’m good, you? Is this the blog post you wanted me to read?
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MOnday’s post. My 3 month anniversary.
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Oooh, oops. Now I just feel stupid. I could have sworn that yesterday you said, “Tomorrow’s post”! By the way, have you ever read any James Patterson books?
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Dob’t feel stupid! Who knows what I said yesterday, I am such a kook. I’m struggling to remember what I said this morning. lol Yes, I have read a few Patterson books. He’s okay. I read a lot of Grisham, Nelson DeMille, John Saul, Koontz, and anything in the DaVinci code mold.
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LOVE Saturdays!!! 🙂
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Me too. lol Thanks for stopping by.
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I love the saga, the action, the energy generated and the vivid imagery. It takes talent to keep a story flowing while keeping the reader wanting more. You, my friend, have achieved BOTH. Well done.
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Thank you for saying that. I appreciate it.
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Amazing!!!
I could see all of it in my head 😮
I hope he finds her,and his desperation would make him take the next step and introduce himself to her!! 😀
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Thanks for reading and thanks for your kind words.
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🙂
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Great one! Nice work! 🙂
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Thanks for stopping by to read. Have a great day.
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Elusive Lass….She’ll be back…She’s yours…. 😉
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LOL You are right my friend. Thanks for reading.
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I like how this is going, waiting to find out what happens next! 🙂
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Thanks for stopping by to read. I appreciate it. Have a great day.
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Why was I picturing her with long, shiny mahogany hair? Hmmmm.
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Don’t know. She was a blonde. I believe her hair color is called ashy platinum blonde.
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Maybe I was just pairing her with the picture. Ok. I’ll go for blonde. I can identify…with the hair color anyway.
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LOL Thanks, I think.
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I imagined a girl with dark hair, too!
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lol Oh, Meg. That was the best pic I could find to fit this. You know, I am beginning to realize how these long string of comments are read. I am not the only one reading comments. In truth, they fascinate me. I hope you are well.
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I often read your commenters, especially the longer ones! It’s interesting to see everyone’s reactions!
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LOL When I am awake alone at night, I do the same. I laugh at my stupidities. And some of the commentors are hysterical. Laughter is the best medicine, right Doc?
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Absolutely! You have a really nice “fan club” here!!!
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Smile. A few wackos like me. I will be posting a sweet thank you for my 3 month anniversary this Monday
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I look forward to it!
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Thanks
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Oh, that devil girl. Probably best off not running after her any more.
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What I should have done is run IN THE OPPOSITE DIRECTION. Disappointed in your comment’s lack of sarcasm. You do have a reputation to uphold.
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Oh no you didn’t!!
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lol
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oh now i knw ur name, finally….my friend i seriously admire the way you write…its awesome
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Thank you for saying that. I appreciate it.
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This is very cinematic, I imagine the scene cuts, dramatic music, the background blurring as you run. I imagined a brunette too, thick dark hair, ruby red lipstick lol!
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Laughing my butt off. And I really shouldn’t can’t afford to lose any. Thanks for the comment. Always appreciate your input. Honestly, my wife rarely reads my blog, but every Saturday she is reading. She insisted it being a blond (just like her). And the charcter name Allie, is her nickname. Go figure. I tell you, I have having fun with this experiment. Never thought I would write about it. Imagine if it really came to life, I imagine Devil Girl wouls reappear (asking for her cut).
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Ha! That would be devilish indeed! You are having fun torturing your readers with these cliffhanger endings! 😩
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Het, look who’s talking. Your soldier stories always left us hanging. I was lucky I read it in a two day period. Everyone else was tortured. You know how to cliffhang as well. Smile.
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Hehehe! *steeples fingers, evil laugh*
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lol One of these night I will be up at three in the morning laughing over this comment.
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Reblogged this on Crazy Pasta Child.
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Thank you for the reblog. I appreciate it. Have a wonderful day.
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MOAR
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Every Saturday. Thanks for reading.
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oh no.. just like that.. lovely imagery my friend! 🙂
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Thanks.
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🙂 welcome
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Hey! It’s The Red-Cape Potato! I tagged you for the Character Christmas List:
https://ravingsofthercp.wordpress.com/2015/12/21/character-christmas-list-tag/
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Sorry, I don’t have to particpate in the tags or awards. Thanks for thinking of me. I’m busy marketing my unpublished manuscripts and screenplays. And between that, family, and this blog I really don’t have much time. Thank you for thinking of me. I hope I haven’t offended you in any way.
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No problem at all. I’m not offended 🙂
Good luck with your marketing 😀
Stay safe and take care.
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Thank you. I hope you and yours have a wonderful holiday season.
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Thanks!
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Great writing I love it!!!
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Thank you so much. I appreciate your reading it.
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You’re welcome!!!
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Great descriptive writing…i felt the panic and felt I was among the throng of people, watching the final moments and witnessing the disappointment.
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Thanks for saying that. Coming from a writer like you it means so much
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You are welcome, my friend, but your writing definitely speaks for itself!!
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Thanks for saying that.
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you are welcome 🙂
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Very nice. 🙂
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Thanks
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Dang, I didn’t want that to end! I love poetry and I also write poetry… I can’t wait for the next part!!!
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Thank you for saying that.
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I meant it. I loved it! Now, go finish it!!
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Getting it ready for Saturday
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Oh,so much pain and despair.Unrequited Love ?Every man has his own sad story,it’s rather inevitable and that’s how you become mature.Poignant poem,your sentiments are dramatically flowing …
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Thank you very much.
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Man who loves so much, so madly is always in most of women dreams and desires. Beautiful…
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Thanks. Love is good, but I have a thing for bad girls. And that is where my problems begin
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