Don Luccini’s Daughter (100 Words)


Don Luccini’s Daughter

A man in control of his universe, Don Gino Luccini’s accent caressed every syllable, “Why are you here?”

Ray Gamba admired Sofia Luccini’s portrait. “To bring this killer to justice.”

“Forget justice.” The angry Mafioso smirked. “Bring him to me.”

Gamba squirmed. The alluring young lady in the painting appears to look back at him.

“I will pay you handsomely for delivering Sofia’s killer.”

“Forget your dirty money,” he cursed. Luccini would never understand I loved his daughter.

“Detective, you have no idea how I feel.”

Gamba sighed, if you only knew how I feel after accidentally shooting your daughter.


Photo taken from Google Images.


132 thoughts on “Don Luccini’s Daughter (100 Words)

    1. So happy you enjoyed this. I have wanted to post a mobster story since I started blogging. Then, it suddenly came tome last night,

      WOw you response thrilled me. You appeared to really enjoy this.

      Thank you for all ofyour wonderful support. I appreciate it. And I will never forgetit either. XOXOXOXO

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  1. Wow! Seems Gamba has brought the killer to justice, if only Luccini knew. Sofia can decide, peering down with artist’s license on the men she loves.
    Very clever, Andrew. I didn’t expect this end.


    1. Laughing. Gamba did bring the culrpit to justice. Happy you appreciated this.Forsolong I wanted to post a mobster story and couldnever come up with anything. Thak suddenly it hit me last night, Thank you.


  2. niiiiice 🙂
    Perfect ending – you set the scene up so calmly then WHAM! right between the eyes 🙂
    I would have one suggestion, if I may – the last phrase:
    “if you only knew how I feel after accidentally shooting your daughter.”
    I would put in italics, since it is a thought….
    just my opinion…
    again – awesome write!

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        1. LOL The Mobster wants to kill the person who murdered his daughter. The detective loved his daughter in secrecy, but her accidnetally shot her. So the mobster left him in charge of finding the murderer.


  3. oh my God !!how type is dt killer who demands portrait of his beloved sofhiya who is murderd by him .is he a phyco type killer or ur word”a man in control his universe ” is belonged from Diago Rivera ‘s painting (1934)or any historical event?plz reply.what is a alluring type- ur lines.i became as feard.suspensive bt beautyfully written .


  4. oh God !!how is dt guy who demands his beloved ‘s portrait who is murderd by he a phyco type killer or ur lines”a man in control his universe” is belonged from Diago Rivera(1934)’s painting or any historical event?plz reply.what a alluring n suspensive lines u have written.


  5. Unexpected twist here.
    Nicely done.
    At times I wasn’t sure who was speaking, though. Had to read it 3 times.
    Pardon my wonky brain! 😁

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    1. No, I should have been clearer with that. Thanks for leting me know. I appreciate it. Also, the final line was the main characters thoughts, I should have italicized that.

      Thanks for reading and for your suggestions. Much appreciated.

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