In a recent conversations with my lovely friend writer Sarah Potter I found myself challenged to write a poem mixing nature with love. Here is my submission. If you would like to read Sarah Potter’s beautiful words you can find her at Sarah Potter Writes.
sarahpotterwrites.wordpress.com
Your Love Always Surrounds Me
.
Alone on a park bench
A kaleidoscope of butterflies perched on me
colouring my loneliness
describing your love so tenderly
The sun blushed on me
A soft breeze grazed my trembling cheek
The butterflies smiled at me
These are the signs of your love I so seek
They led me to an oak
It stood tall and firm with leaves of green
Then a flower in bloom
Akin to the beauty of a love so serene
Waterfalls speak of you
You caress me like drops of falling rain
Drench yourself in her love
Their sweet words slowly eased my pain
They gave me much to take
No matter where I go or what I see
Now, I am never alone
Cause your love always surrounds me
BEAUTIFUL!!!!! 🙂
LikeLiked by 1 person
Thank you so much for stopping by and leaving your lovely comment. Very appreciated.
LikeLiked by 1 person
This beauty was a treat for the eyes and medicine for the soul, vibrant and heartfelt. Bellisimo!
LikeLiked by 1 person
Thank you so much Anna. I appreciate your stopping by to read and comment. Thanks.
LikeLiked by 1 person
Happy for you.
My pleasure
LikeLiked by 1 person
Not sure where you are from, but here it is time for bed. I have my Batman jammies. So this will be my last reply of the night. Great talking to you Anna. I will go to sleep smiling. Have a good one.
LikeLiked by 2 people
Happy i could make you smile. Nice talking to you as well. Sleep well, Mr. Batman.
LikeLiked by 1 person
I agree with Anna. A treat this was. Sarah will beam! Fantastic job you did.
LikeLiked by 2 people
Thank you Baby. Love you.
LikeLike
Great MIND thinks alike.
LikeLike
Splendid,this is!
LikeLiked by 1 person
Thank you. Appreciate your words
LikeLike
so beautiful ❤
LikeLiked by 1 person
Thank you Eva. Your visits are so welcomed.
LikeLike
I will just add something to this beautiful poem.
“Love” surrounds all of us…just feel it.
touching poem 🙂
LikeLiked by 1 person
Oh, I have been preaching that for years. Love is all around us. We need to bask in it. Relish it. And spread it around in return.
Thank you for your wonderful comment.
LikeLike
Beautiful! Well written!
LikeLike
Thank you so much for your kind words. I appreciate it my friend
LikeLiked by 1 person
You’re utmost welcome! 😁
LikeLiked by 1 person
Wow! What a composition! So beautifully romantic and yet sounds like a longing for responsive love. And the image took your poem to another level.
LikeLiked by 1 person
You have me at a loss for words. Thank you so much. Your kindness overwhelms me.
LikeLiked by 1 person
You are welcome. TC
LikeLiked by 1 person
You are a gift to WordPress. This is so tender and beautiful.. ❤ ❤ ❤
LikeLiked by 1 person
Oh my. Thank you for your wonderful words. I appreciate them. You are much too kind
LikeLiked by 1 person
I dont know I just feel the beauty in that poem its not only kindness but thank you ❤
LikeLiked by 1 person
What a nice image to print in my mind first thing in the morning and keep for the rest of the day❤️
LikeLiked by 1 person
Ortensia, you of the traveling hubby. This should guide you. When he is on the road find his love all around you. If that doesn’t work, check the wine cellar. I vet you would find something there. lol
i left a comment on your book club post. I have been saved into spam folders. I may be there
LikeLiked by 2 people
I usually check wine cellar first…..I hate waste time😉
I’ll check your comment…..didn’t even know I have a spam folder but why u ended up there?😳
LikeLiked by 1 person
I usually turn to my wine rack when I have a bad day. Or a lonely day. Or a good day. Well, I think you get the picture.
**hiccup**
These are glitches of wordpress. If you ever place a comment on a blog and see it immediately disappear, you are in SPam. And no one will know you are commenting until they search their folder.
LikeLike
But I cannot find any spam folder either😱
LikeLiked by 1 person
lol You go to your dashboard. Then on the left hand side you have a column of icons. One is for comments. Click there. You will see your comments broken into categories. Approved, pending, spam, and trashed. Click on spam and you will find junk mail and probably my comment. If your blogging by phone it is even easer to check comments. Just go into wordpress and one of the options towards the bottom is comments. Then you will see a drop down screen with the same options.
I always forget, but I try to make it a habit of checking there before I stop blogging for the day.
LikeLike
dear lord what a tool you made me discover today.!I saw your comment and five pages of other comments mainly from one single website .i left them there just in case it is a stalker.
LikeLiked by 1 person
LOL You are fairly new to WordPress. This my third or fourth year. Even this moron had to learn something. Now, if I could only master the talent to lower the toilet seat. Then, I can truly feel as if I have accomplished something.
LikeLiked by 2 people
I trained my husband to pee sitting down😂it took me nearly 20 years……
LikeLiked by 1 person
LOL 20 years isn’t bad. My old man never learned he trick.
LikeLiked by 1 person
I can’t find your comment😔
LikeLiked by 1 person
I will go back. WordPress is killing me. I shall return
LikeLike
Very nice indeed!
LikeLiked by 2 people
Appreciate that. Thank you
LikeLiked by 1 person
Nature and love entwined. Artfully done TLAB.
LikeLiked by 1 person
Thank you my friend. Appreciate that
LikeLiked by 1 person
Beautiful. Your words are like a caress of the warmest breeze.
LikeLike
Challenge fulfilled with beauty and grace.
LikeLiked by 1 person
Thanks Bernadette. It wasn’t easy. I appreciate your words
LikeLike
Well done, sir! Challenge met with ecstasy… 😀
LikeLiked by 1 person
Thank you Lisa. lol. I struggled writing it but I think it turned out well.
LikeLiked by 1 person
Lovely, Andrew! You do the topic of “love” so well. Please have a good Thursday!
LikeLiked by 1 person
Thank you for saying that Mia. I appreciate it. Have A great Thursday
LikeLiked by 1 person
You’re welcome, Andrew, and thank you.
LikeLiked by 1 person
I’d say you met the challenge pretty Damn good!
LikeLiked by 1 person
Thanks Walt. It wasn’t easy. Had to look around to see her and get inspired
LikeLiked by 2 people
I award you 10 out of 10 and an A+ for this 🙂 You have certainly risen to the challenge, Andrew. I knew you could write about nature. Such wonderful images here, and you’ve chosen to mention my favourite tree. In my previous novel, I dedicated a whole chapter to an oak tree and the ecosystem it supports, as seen through the eyes of an eleven year-old boy who has been raised in the wilderness. In the same novel, there is a scene surrounding a waterfall in a Scottish forest. As for butterflies, I adore them.
Back to your poem — I think that when a person is in love, nature takes on an incandescent glow. All the colours seem brighter, the scents stronger, and the birdsong louder. I think you’ve captured that intensification of the senses just perfectly.
Please don’t make this your only nature poem, now you’ve taken the plunge!
LikeLiked by 2 people
Sarah, thank you for the generosity in your award. I struggled badly with this. I imagine the next time I attempt this, it will be much easier after passing this initial hurdle.
Your novel sounds interesting. I have read your haikus so I know how beautiful and descriptive you can be.
I consider myself a novelist/screenwriter. Poetry is like a new hobby for me. I am still learning. My friend Nandita has served as a mentor to me. And through her I have learned to try to make my writing richer. Because of the importance of finding the write metaphor or description in poetry, I have gone back and tweaked my novels, improving their descriptions as well.
Poetry is not about stringing along words eloquently. It is breathing life into the words we use through metaphors, colors, and yes nature. Using the five senses and emotion in out poetry will only make it real.
As for love, I agree with everything you say. Although winter is still hanging on stubbornly to New York City; there are little sign of spring. And I find myself drawn to them. Appreciating the colors and the circle of life. For me, love will always be the greatest gift. To be treasured.
Thank you for the challenge, your kind words, and for pushing me to be a better writer. Have a wonderful day, that is another gift we should treasure. Our limited time here on Earth. Be well.
LikeLiked by 2 people
Andrew, with every mountain we climb, a higher summit beckons! It is often the case that when you look back at things that once seemed impossible, you wonder how you ever found them difficult.
Personally, I find writing poetry (especially haiku) and flash fiction has helped my novel-writing tremendously, as it encourages sharp focus and careful choice of words.
I am glad you have Nandita as a friend and mentor.
I value so much my beta-readers when it comes to my novels – their constructive criticism and encouragement. One word of advice, try to find beta-readers who are good writers themselves, or avid readers, or having editing/copywriting experience, or all of those things (if you’re lucky).
Winter is still doing its best to hang on the SE coast of the UK, too, although I do have a few primulas in bloom and the birds are busy building their nests.
Yes, we must treasure our limited time on Earth, and creativity our greatest mission.
LikeLiked by 1 person
I adore your reply. I have learned to treasure every moment; even the bad ones.
Thanks for everything. You are a blessing.
LikeLiked by 1 person
Holy smokes! Amazeballs. You have described the Little’s world. Butterflies do smile😀 🦋 perhaps being in love is like seeing the world through a child’s eyes. Connection. What a wonderful experience for you to have to seek those things and you will never be the same. The words are true ..I know whomever loves me hears my laugh when the breeze rustles the trees and tickels thier leaves. Your poem IS BEAUTIFULL. Well done. You should take a bow and of course we are shouting encore.
LikeLiked by 1 person
What an amazing comment. You humble me with your words. Thank you. When we open our eyes (eye in my case) we find a world of love around us, Thrilled that you liked this and by your comments.
Your statement “the words are true” make me smile. When we are apart from the person we so love, we need to find them all around us. Thanks for the wonderful comments. They are so greatly appreciated.
LikeLiked by 1 person
I love the mix of nature with love, especially the waterfall image! Also, how nice that Sarah inspired this one 😊
LikeLiked by 1 person
She truly did. I have always shied away from nature, even metaphors of nature. Thank you for reading and for your kind words.
LikeLiked by 1 person
Lovely…
LikeLiked by 1 person
Thank you Leslie. I appreciate it. Hope you are well.
LikeLiked by 1 person
I am thank you for asking. Smiles.
LikeLiked by 1 person
Smiles right back.
LikeLiked by 1 person
A delightful poetic feast for the soul in every way! Lovely… 🙂
LikeLiked by 1 person
Thank you Joy. You words do mean so much. I hope your days are filled with the wonders of spring. God bless.
LikeLiked by 1 person
Since I am someone who writes about nature quite a bit, I think you have created something beautiful. Bravo!
LikeLiked by 1 person
Have you been posting regularly? I just saw you weren’t followed, so I followed you again. Have I missed posts? I thought you were away.
Thank you for your kind words. You write so beautifully about nature, so I really appreciate your words.
LikeLiked by 1 person
Oh, my muse has been quite busy! 2-3 posts a day. How on earth did you miss me? Now, you have some reading to do- LOL
LikeLiked by 1 person
For some reason we were disconnected. So, I just followed you again. Later this afternoon, I will visit you and catch up. I thought you were on a small vacation. Don’t worry, I will be there soon.
LikeLiked by 1 person
Marvelous- I look forward to getting your reactions.
LikeLiked by 1 person
You will
LikeLiked by 1 person
Beautiful!
LikeLiked by 1 person
I am so happy that you think so. Than you for reading and for sharing your thoughts.
LikeLiked by 1 person
Magnifique!
LikeLiked by 1 person
Thank you. I appreciate that
LikeLiked by 1 person
You’re welcome, Andrew. 🙂
LikeLiked by 1 person
What a lovely and beautiful piece! So, so well penned!! I truly love it
LikeLiked by 1 person
Thank you so much Ana. I appreciate your words
LikeLiked by 1 person
never alone because the love surrounds us :)) beautiful and true! :))
LikeLiked by 1 person
Thank you. Happy you appreciated it.
LikeLiked by 1 person
Power of Love!
LikeLiked by 1 person
Thank you for reading., Yes that is he power of love.
LikeLiked by 1 person
Your lovely butterflies! Very pretty, Andrew
LikeLiked by 1 person
Thank you Diane. So appreciate your lovely words.
LikeLike
This is a very beautiful post! Love how you entwined the love and nature!
dwight
LikeLiked by 1 person
Thank you so much Dwight. I have never done that before (the nature part). Thanks for your kind words. They are appreciated.
LikeLiked by 1 person
Beautifully written 💕 serenity
LikeLiked by 1 person
Thank you for reading and for your kind words
LikeLike
🤗💖
LikeLiked by 1 person
Reblogged this on By the Mighty Mumford and commented:
NEAT ILLUSTRATION A ROMANTIC GENTLENESS IN THIS POEM—GOOD FORM!—DEFINITELY WORTH THE READ!
LikeLiked by 1 person
Thanks John
LikeLiked by 1 person
Simply beautiful
I feel the love you write of 💕
LikeLiked by 1 person
Thank you. I never wrote a nature live poem. Trying to expand my writing horizons. Thanks
LikeLiked by 1 person
Definitely enjoyed it 😊
LikeLiked by 1 person
Thanks
LikeLiked by 1 person
😊😊😊
LikeLiked by 1 person
I love the marvel, it is so gentle.❤❤❤
LikeLiked by 1 person
Thank you so much for reading and your kind words.
LikeLike
Hey Andrew, how are you my friend? Sorry if I’m writing to you on your older post.
It is my understanding that our friend “Nandita” has posted an important update on a current situation she has been dealing with. Okay, so I’ve been getting these weird comments on some of my blog post by a person who is going by the name: “Nandita Yata”
Here’s how they wrote on my blog:
“How my heart swells when I read you, Charlie. Amazing! ❤”
“Charlie, you sexy man, I wish I could write have as good as you. ❤”
“Charlie, your poetry makes me tingle with excitement. ❤”
Whoever is doing this is trying to cause problems. Have you been receiving strange comments on any of your blog post by that person?
P.S Please write back soon.
LikeLike
Yes I have received these too. And things worse than than. Don’t know what we can do to help her. This hater won’t quit.
LikeLiked by 1 person
It breaks my heart why these people are messing with her. 😦 It’s not cool at all.
LikeLiked by 1 person
Not cool at all.
LikeLiked by 1 person
I spoke to Nandita late last night. I think she needed my help but I went to sleep. Here in L.A. it gets late. Right now, its morning. Have you been helping her out? This is sad… 😦
LikeLiked by 1 person
As much as I can. Thanks for helping her out. Appreciate that
LikeLiked by 1 person
You welcome my friend. She hasn’t written to me yet, so I’m waiting for her to write me back.
LikeLike
Truly touching…….
LikeLike
Thanks. Appreciate it
LikeLike
Pleasure.
LikeLiked by 1 person
Good morning amor. Just letting you know here I’m up since i don’t know if you’ll check there now. I read your response. It was to the point and it was great.
LikeLike
Good morning. Sorry if I was tough on him. he was one of your followers. hope you slept well. hopefully you body recovered from your rafting and things. i am in love with you. xoxo
LikeLike
No it is alright. You did perfect. Proud of you. You’ll be posting shortly yeah?
Te amo tanto. xoxo.
LikeLike
yeah tonight I post. xoxo and thanks for saying that te ano tambien
LikeLike
Beautiful, simply beautiful😊😊😊
LikeLiked by 1 person
Thank you so much
LikeLike
This is so beautiful… actually magical😊
LikeLiked by 1 person
I am very happy that you think so. Thank you so much for your sweet words. They are appreciated.
LikeLike
Your poetry is a treat so pleasure was mine.🙂
LikeLiked by 1 person
Thanks for saying that.
LikeLiked by 1 person
Wonderful tribute to a lovely girl”Sarah”.she had inspired you to write an amazing poem as words are wandering and flying like butterflies in the garden of unseen love,my dear dew!!most beautiful and lovely poem touchs the heart in melodious way❤
LikeLike