The Stripper (100 Words)
The seductive stripper swayed onto the stage.
Her motions were as smooth as her glistening abdomen. Oscillating hips accentuated her beguiling figure.
Every graceful movement concealed her pain. Her sensual gyrations confirmed her loneliness.
Dancing to forget, she was poetry in motion.
She offered her nakedness to their lustful eyes.
Her sad eyes mirrored her dark and barren life.
Loud music reverberated in her heart like thunderbolts echoing in a cave. The songs failed to silence the cries inside her head.
The stripper communicated her passions through dance.
Unveiling her body to so many.
She revealed her soul to none.
Intriguing short
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Thanks so much my friend
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I imagine this to be all too true. Wonderful write, Drew.
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Sad and probably true…
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I think so. Thank you.
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NOT sad surviving raising kids paying bills living, yes men come to the club could be your man is it our fault no. People blame strippers for everything sex drugs.
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Killer ending! I feel her sad and lonely existence.
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Amazing piece.
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Thank you
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welcome
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I loved it, beautifully written! The last line was excellent and had an immediate impact on me. 🙂
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Wow! This was great! Wonderful imagery.
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Thank you so much. I appreciate that, especially coming from you.
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Aw, my pleasure Andrew. Smiles.
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Fantastic…. She revealed her soul to none… how painful
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Thank you for stopping by to read and comment. I appreciate that.
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It is my pleasure my dear!
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Very sad.
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Thank you so much for stopping by to read and comment.
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Beautiful Pain by a Beautiful Woman, to An Ugly Lustful World.
I cannot understand why God gave so many “Curves” to women, that Men Lust for seeing those curves or playing with those curves.
God should have given Man also Breasts and Curves, so that they would not Envy us Women and Helpless Women would have need to expose their bodies to please men.
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Wowza!
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Thank you
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Wow! Intense. Is this the one that you were inspired to write? We try to forget out pain in whatever manner possible but the irony here is that she reveals everything that the eyes can see, yet conceals everything that they can’t. It takes one who knows to actually understand. Good stuff!
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Amazing…she revealed her soul to noone – such powerful words these are!
I remember writing a poem in Hindi about the life of a stripper…maybe I will post it on my blog some day with a translation! 🙂
Cheers
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I think you’re right.
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She can give me a lap dance anytime, and I promise to keep my bones in line.
Hope you’re eye is better!
~PR
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LOL Thanks
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I suppose it’s a type of self preservation that a stripper or exotic dancer; as some would prefer to be called these days, would need to feel that her soul is intact if her body is not. You captured her loneliness superbly.
Be well, dear friend! xo
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I have no experience of being a stripper (womankind the world over will be mighty relieved to hear), but your story strikes me as being psychologically very plausible, Drew. I can imagine that someone forced by circumstance into that line of work might well begin thinking of her body as something separate from herself, and so while she’s dancing, she is able to keep everything she really cares about separate and hidden from all those greedy, prying eyes.
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That’s the life of a stripper said in poetic form.
100 words tell of a novel of thousands of words.
Good one.
I have done one, published today.
Welcome
Shiva
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Thank you so much for stopping by and for your great comments my friend. I appreciate the visit.
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sensitively sensual
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Thank you
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Brilliant!!
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Thank you
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You’re welcome.
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This line: “She revealed her soul to none.” to my breath away. Haunting and beautiful.
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Thank you. It is my favorite line too. Glad you liked this. Thanks for the visit.
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Nice poem. Captured the moves of the stripper very well as well as her thoughts.
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Thank you. I tried. I imagine that is how they feel thanks for reading.
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That’s not how they feel you have no clue.
Maybe you should walk into a strip club or clubs
And ask them you think they feel sexy you think they feel good
There cause of money and to take your money your mans
Your husbands money it’s a job.
Guess what and men give it a lot…
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Lovely and seductive
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Thanks forcreading and for the comments. Have a good one.
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My pleasure😊
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Love the evocative imagery. Great.
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Thank you. So happy you liked it.
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Oh, so true. “I don’t care who sees me naked, I do care who sees me crying…” – that’s a quote that I love. A body is a body, we all have the same parts. But your soul is unique, so to bare it is an enormous risk. Love this so much, Drew.
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Good quote. Love your comments Meg. Agree with your thoughts thank you.
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You’re welcome!
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I loved the ending! Brilliant!
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Thank you for stopping to read and for your kind words.
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You’re welcome! 🙂
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“She revealed her soul to none.” Brilliant ending Andrew. Wishing you a wonderful week. ~ Mia
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Thank you for stopping by. And thanks for your kind words. I likecthat ending too. Becwell.
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You’re welcome, thank you.
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great piece Andrew….a sad tale and loved the last line the best 🙂
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Thank you for stopping by. And thanks for your kind words.
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You’re always welcome my friend, I’m often a day behind with my reading these days…busy times😊
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Understood
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Beautifully said!!
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Thank you
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Wow! Amazing write! Very similar in ways but different environments. I often change personalities when a techno song plays. But behind my bold and assertive moves, behind this personality that emerges, is sadness which few know about. Well, except ya’ll now.
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Youv write such great comments. Music does change our moods. And we do tend to hide part of outselves. Thanks.
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A truly evocative poem, moving and sensual, wrapped in 100 words, excellent.
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Thank you. Appreciate that.
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Powerful ending lines.
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Thank you. Appreciate that.
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Wow. Well I guess we know what you were doing over the weekend 😉 the end really twists the knife.
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Lol. No, I wad resting my eye. Lol. Thank you.
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So that’s what they call it nowadays, resting your eyes? Lol 😉
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You almost made me fall out of my seat.
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Lol. Well you have to rest your eyes somewhere
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You’re killing me
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I’m the word assassin. I offer witty assassinations upon demand.
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Hahaha. You sure are.
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I’m honing my verbal swords. Oh abs I’m going to work on Aerials for NaNoWriMo in nov
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I’m sharpening my verbal swords for NaNoWriMo. I’m going to work on Aerials for it.
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Is that what they’re calling it now? Lol
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Lol. Freaking typos
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Excellent.
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Appreciate your visit and your words.
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Yeah.dt beautifull stripper nt faces many difficulties.a song can do a dance;but fell to reveal her inside.good n heart touching li
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Thank you. She has to show her body, but her feelings and her soul are only hers to see.
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Yeah.i m understanding of stripper feelings.
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I think it is a sad job. Men look at them as sex objects. No respect. Almost likecsex animals. That has to be sad.
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Donn’t worry about world coz dis does not understand dt why is dt stripper forced to do dt work.she is forcing by neccessity of life or her family.d world can only enjoy her show.those guys r neccessary for her bussiness.
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Reminds me of Tina Turner’s song: Private Dancer.
Love the last two lines of your poem! …they say so much in so few words, and really bring the rest of the poem into clear focus, very good progression throughout your poem.
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Thank you so much for saying that. These ladies reveal so much; I imagine it is necessary for them to save something for themselves. And yes I remember sensual that Tina Turner song. Thank you for reading and for your lovely comments.
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She revealed her soul to none
What a closer
How’s the chimp
These days Andrew
Hope all is well
Sheldon
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Surviving with one eye and waiting for my surgery date. Thanks for asking. Be well my friend.
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Take it easy
I will heck in a couple of days
Sheldon
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Magnificent
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Oh gosh, I tell you I do not envy those ladies. That had to be the hardest job inthe world!
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Yes it must be. Also the most judged job. And a whole slew of other negatives. Thanks.
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For sure!
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oh geez. sensual yet so so deep! 😀 😀 😀 And this line: “Dancing to forget, she was poetry in motion.”
Here’s some claps for the stripper’s maker!! ❤ ❤ ❤
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Lol. Thank you so much for your lovely comments. You are so sweet.
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and honest 😉
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Awwww
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brilliant words and sensual
thank you for sharing
kisses
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Thank you so much for taking tge time out to read and leave such wonderful comments.
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oh welcome
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‘Unveiling her body to so many.
She revealed her soul to none.’
The life of a stripper captured in sensual poetry. Great job.
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She was poetry in motion ~ indeed!
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Thanks for reading.
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We all hide our pain…in one fashion or another.
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Yes we do. Thanks for the visit. Be well.
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You also, Andrew.
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Thank you
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Not that I know any strippers, but this is how I imagined them to be – their soul far removed from their body.
Excellent work!
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Thank you so much for your kind words. I imagine that is how a stripper feels.
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She revealed her soul to none.. wow
So completely sad and beautifully written
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What a great contrast of black and white, light and darkness. Nicely written Andrew. A sad reality for some women unfortunately.
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“Loud music reverbrared in her heart like thunderorbolts echoing in a cave…d songs failed to silence.d cries .
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I think-every women r as striper directly n indirectly.m i right?dear dew !!plz reply n ask too Allie
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Most of us don’t reveal our soul … unless we find that special person who loves us unconditionally.
Insightful and poignant piece.
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