The following is the opening of my protagonist’s first entry in his diary.
Looking back at my life, it is obvious that destiny chose me, this only child of Cuban refugees, to be its guardian of justice. For every twist and turn in my life and my father’s life before me, prepared me for the role I was born to play. Chosen to be a tool of destiny, fate sculpted me through misfortune and injustice, to be its great equalizer; its merciless hammer of justice.
As hard as my father tried to guide me, he created the thing he detested most, a puppet on a string. Who could have guessed the United States government would pull the cords? If there truly is a day of judgment, I hope, my father and the good Lord analyze the rationale behind my actions. Destiny led me down this God-forsaken path. Fate made me what I am.
If they understand that, then and only then, will I be forgiven for all my sins.
Excellent opening. Really mysterious and attention-grabbing.
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Thank you so much for reading. Appreciate your comment. Coming from a successful author like you it means a lot to me.
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Still have trouble acknowledging the success thing. Always tempted to point at a copy of ‘The Hobbit’ and say ‘he’s talking to you’. 😀
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I understand. Thanks for stopping by. I appreciate your comments. Have a wonderful weekend.
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Enjoy your weekend too. 🙂
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I love this one…beautiful opening..
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Thank you so much for reading and commenting. I really appreciate it. Have a wonderful weekend.
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When reading the words you can feel the personal uncertainty yet the strong commitment and responsibility accepted for the role the “executioner” plays. I like the way you include his ultimate concern about judgement and the linking of the two most important entities in his life, God and his father. Duty, however, must guide his decisions.
Great diary entry. Tells a lot about the character in just a few words.
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Thank you for saying that. Your comment encourages me to keep writing. The final judgement does haunt this character. You have my glowing. Thanks so much. Have a wonderful weekend my friend.
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Very evocative beginning and I like your voice , it’s so believable …hope you continue as I want to follow more ….love and blessings , megxxx
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Thank you so much. This is a completed manuscript./screenplay I am trying to market. Thanks for reading. Have a wonderful weekend.
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Wishing you all the best !
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Thanks so much
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Diary entries, letters… what a great way to get in the character’s mind. How is your current work in progress coming? I’m stalled in mine! I think I need to take a break!
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Thanks so much for the read. Well, this novel screenplay and Paradox are complete. My third novel that I wrote of the other day Dark Paradise, is also complete. My current project is plodding along slowly. Blog and querying eating up much of my time. Time management will be the key. Need to stop the time consuming things, like sleeping, eating, having a life. lol Thanks for stopping by. Have a wonderful weekend.
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You have a great weekend too!
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Thanks
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Marvelous !!! 😀
Tx for stopping by and liking my posts and at the same time following me.
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You have a good blog. I will be back to review more.
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I’m interested in your intriguing beginning. It grabbed my attention, pulled me in, and now I need more. What are you about to do that makes you crave forgiveness? Well done in creating a brilliant opening.
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Thank you so much. Coming from a published author that means so much. Your comments brings much encouragement. Thank you so much for reading. I really appreciate it.
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Thank you so much. I am flattered and I appreciate the gesture. Have a wonderful day.
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This is awesome! Thank you for sharing!
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Thank you for stopping by to read. I appreciate your comments. Have a wonderful day.
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I… Need to read the rest. This is dark and intriguing, something about the rawness of this opener that’s got me to read this three times
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Oh, my. Thank you so much for saying that. This encourages me too continue trying to find someone to represent my work. Thanks for reading. Have a wonderful weekend.
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I can’t wait to read the rest. Great start!
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Thanks so much for reading.
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What was your sins…..I promise I won’t tell anybody out of WordPress. lol Nice writing leaves you wanting more.
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Not me. He was a government assassin. Thank you so much. Really appreciate it.
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Projection maybe? uh!
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Yeah
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OK it will just be between you and me. I will not say a word to anybody. If they stumble upon this comment then I take no responsibility how they were led to here. Deal!
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Cool. lol Love your visits.
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Very intriguing and mysterious, kinda of hooking me to read more. Great work!
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Thank you so much for reading and commenting. I have seen your comments on other blogs. It appears as if you leave a trail of lovely flowers wherever you go. Take care and have a good weekend.
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It’s my pleasure to give equal attention to the writers I love and admire. 🙂
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Thanks. You made me blush
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Is this historical fiction? I can sense greatness with this character. Thoughts have given us an alluring peek into this piece. Great choice! 🙂
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On occasions it touches on historical fiction. It does covers Castro’s coming to power in Cuba. Never really thought about it. That is what I love about you. You challenge my mind. Thank you.
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🙂 It sounds very intriguing! And I only challenge, I am not going to shoot 😀
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No reasons to shoot me. I am a lover not a fighter. Oh, that reminds me, I have a stalker, and not the good kind. Someone keeps coming to my page and calls me Lonely Heart Club and then writes crazy crap. He also complained about my conversations with ladies on my blog.
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Oh my, the jealous type.. maybe he wants you to have conversations with men instead. 😀
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LOL SQUARED. (You see I am paying attention). Yeah, just my luck. I couldn’t be stalked by a Playboy bunny or Victoria’s Secret model. Some dude with a blog about greeting cards is stalking me! IN case he reads this, let me irate him with a clever change in subject. Damn, I would have been one of those students placing broccoli on your desk to impress you Teach.
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Hehehe 😀 I am in continual daze of all the fun ways you try to amaze
LOLxLOLxLOL =”cuba” it is
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lol Growing up I had to entertain myself quite a bit. That can be the only explanation.
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Blaming it on your imaginary friends.. I see ;D
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I really shouldn’t do that. Even they have stopped talking to me.
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😀
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Perhaps James Bond has similar thoughts?
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There’s only two short flash fiction pieces on the page.
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I grew up as a big James Bond fan. so, I guess there is some influence there. Thanks for reading. I will read these in a little while. Thanks for sharing, And thanks for stopping by. I appreciate it. Have a wonderful weekend.
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Enjoy whenever. No rush.
There is infinite time on the net 🙂
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That is one of the wonderful things about the net. I will get to it soon. Thanks for stopping by.
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Thank you so much my friend. I really appreciate it.
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You’re welcome Pal.
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I’m curious as far as the tactics which will be used to secure justice. How I long for sweet justice….and how I hate being a puppet on a string.
I’m sure the rest of the story will move me…the way all of your stories and poems do, thank you for sharing.
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Thank you for reading. He metes out justice brutally. Thank you for reading and commenting. I really appreciate it.
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That would work for me….brutal justice. The letter I wrote to my ex said ” I hope retribution, in whatever form, seeks you out with a vengeance and the delivery is swift and just.”
Great minds!
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Yeah. Sounds like something my main character would write.
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A most excellent opening. Draws in the reader.
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Thanks so much for reading and commenting. I really appreciate it. Have a wonderful weekend.
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so what was his sin? Interesting, waiting for more!!! 🙂
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He killed people for the government. Thanks for reading.
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you are welcome
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Thank you so much. I really appreciate this. Thanks for all your support.
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You have my attention
I love the mystery of it all..
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Thanks so much for saying that. It is one of my completed novels waiting to be represented by a literary agent. Thanks for reading it.
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That is an exciting path to be on 😀
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Writing is exciting. Thanks.
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You have my attention
Great opening
I love the mystery of it all..
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Thanks so much. As a writer I never trust myself. Your encouragement (from a person who writes so beautifully) helps so much.
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Writers always second guess.. But your passion comes through making it a great read..
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That coming from you, now I am floating in heaven. I love the way you write from the heart. You are so good at it.
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I’ll be awaiting your books screenplays and or movies.. I really enjoy your style 😊
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Thank so much.
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Really grabbed my attention and kept me reading! Very great beginning!
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Thank you for reading. Your words encourage me. Have a great weekend.
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most welcome! have a great weekend.
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Thanks you too.
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Awesome writing. Beautiful and thought provoking opening lines.
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Thank you so much for reading and commenting. I really appreciate it.
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Wow!
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I hope that is good. Thanks for reading.
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It sure is good! The whole concept is very unique. I believe that you chartered that seemingly bleak territory great aplomb
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Thank you for saying that. And for the read. It gives me hope. Happy Sunday. Be well.
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You too!
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This was truly very beautiful ….
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Thanks for reading and commenting. I appreciate it.
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My pleasure
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More!
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Thanks for reading
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I’m just a sucker for anything Cuban, well, not the Bearded One, but almost anything. Cuban sandwiches (not the squished heated ones, the crisp fresh bread with meat, cheese, lettuce and onions), black beans and rice with shaved onions on top, Spanish bean soup, yellow rice with saffron and dark haired Cuban girls. I’ve had to get used to not hanging around the girls for the last 38 years. The Child Bride would just not understand. I did high school and college in Tampa in the 60’s and 70’s so many of my classmates were the sons and daughters of those fleeing from the island. It has influenced my writing and I have included one of those daughters in my fiction. Your book has me curious so I’ll have to put it on my list of wanna reads for those minutes not consumed working on the next novel. Thanks for stopping by my page and for following.
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Thanks for that. First. being Cuban i love all the foods you named. Eventually will move back to Miami for food & climate. My novels are unpublished. Still trying to find an agent to represent my work. Thanks for stopping by. I love to follow fellow writers. Are you published? Thanks for stopping by to read.
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SINK RATE is my first novel and is out on Amazon, etc. I have three more under contract with a publisher and I’m working on the next one. It took a LONG time to break through.
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Congratulations. I know how hard it can be. Gets very frustrating. You did it without an agent? Thanks for stopping by. I really appreciate it.
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No agent. Not famous or infamous enough for them to take a chance on a new author. I found a publisher that accepted submissions and they went for it.
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Congrats. I haven’t tried that yet. Will need to take that road. Thanks for the info. Really appreciate it. Best of luck. I will add your books to my list. You write the types of books I read. So, it will be a perfect fit. Thanks so much. So happy to find your blog.
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Good luck to you. Break a keyboard!
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LOL Thanks
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Interesting and intriguing.
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Thank you. I have set that one aside to conentrate on my other work. Thanks for reading.
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Thanks for the follow. It is a little late tonight. I will stop by your blog tomorrow to read and comment. Thanks so much.
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This is a terrific beginning, mysterious and dark. I want to read more and that’s always what you want from a reader – someone turning the page.
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Aw, thank you. I appreciate it.
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This opening grabbed me from the first word! would love to read your book. The voice had me sitting up straight. “Destiny led me down this God-forsaken path. Fate made me what I am.” Thank you for sharing this with us and I’m so glad you found the Cow Pasture Chronicles. Welcome to the fence jumpers. @sheilamgood at Cow Pasture Chronicles
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