Somme-in a little different.
Cleansed
.
It was a lucid afternoon
Straight out of my dreams
We laughed and loved
Feasting on Pepsi, popcorn, and poetry
Drawing her a warm bath
I attempted to read Neruda
Yet she had other plans
Reciting pink verses
Red rhymes cascaded from her glossy lips
Like slippery suds of passion
Soaking me with love
Words floated like translucent bubbles
Washing my flaws, fears, and pain
Rinsing my body, purifying my heart
Baptizing my soul
My beloved took a bath
It was me that she cleansed.
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This poem came from a prompt from my mentor Nandita Yata. Hopefully, she will approve.
The Lonely Author 
Watcher Nandita says, I say dude you are very good.
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Okay, Thank you. Appreciate that
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I was able to picture this lovely scene. Thanks to your poetry.
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That is so nice of you to say Ankit. Appreciate your words. Thank you.
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My pleasure 🙂
Have a wonderful time ahead my friend.
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Thanks. You as well.
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Wonderful writing and imagery, kudos 🙂
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You made me smile. Thank you so much for your kind words.
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Breathtakingly beautiful! 👏
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Thank you Isha. Appreciate that, You are too sweet,
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My pleasure!
P.S. “Baptizing my soul” has me mesmerized!
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You really are so kind. I kind of liked that line as well. Thanks.
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Thank you for sharing 😊
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Thanks for reading.
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Haha! 😁
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A cleansing of body and spirit! Lovely ❤
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Yeah, the best kind. Thanks so much,
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‘My beloved took a bath
It was me that she cleansed.’ – oh my.. mesmerising and beautiful ❤️
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Thank you Sameera. Happy that you liked it. I so appreciate your kind words. Thank you.
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Ah. I loved it Andrew.😉 Pleasure reading you always
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Aaaaw. Thank you for saying that. I appreciate your kindness.
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Do you realize how difficult you’ve made it for me, darling? I have a dual role to play…
As a mentor, this is what i say:
This was somme-in you haven’t done, free verse and you did wonderful job. You opened your poem so evocatively, raising the anxiety in me to see what comes next. The pink verses and red rhymes followed by suds of passion and bubbles of love…oh my! It was a tale dipped in romance of the highest order. And your mentor is left bathing in the luxury of your fine pen.
Now, the muse in me is pushing the mentor away as she can’t stop gushing over your love. I love love love our nights of pepsi and popcorn. And your serenades…swoon. You singing to me while i ‘crunch’, and so many other things… what beautiful love we live! I love you, i do not care what your readers say.
Your mentor is proud and pleased and your muse is ecstatic and glowing, with pink verses and red rhymes that she is ready to lather on you tonight.
Xoxoxo te amo tanto.
Love it ❤️❤️❤️
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Your reaction overwhelmed me. I am going crazy that you liked it. You know I am not one to pen free verse. Also thrilled that the muse is happy and gushing. You know how I wrote this; just like everything else I write. Last two lines first.
Thank you for your support and the way you take the time out to make me a better writer. And thank you for the way you love and care about me. You make me feel so happy and special.
Isn’t that somme-in?
I love you too. ❤ ❤ ❤
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Oh that is somme-in, mi amor! Thank you for saying the things you say to me. You make me a better lover. And like I told you the other night, noone compares to you ❤️❤️❤️
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Leave Sinead out of this Sweetie. Thank you for everything. xoxoxo
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Go to sleep darling. We need to take care of the previous Eye. Catch you in your morning. Sweet dreams. Xoxoxo
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Yawn. Yeah. You go untangle weeds. Lonely Author go to sleep. And please let me sleep. LMFAO. ❤ ❤ ❤
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The man who never lets me sleep saying that!! LMFAO. Mwah!!!!!
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xoxo zzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzz
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Oh and every line was a crescendo…and all I could think of was you and I doing what we do best together.
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Thank you. You cleansed me during our conversation the other day, so this was very fitting. xoxoxo
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And the baptized soul…I cannot believe you used that line. You are so so amazing. This is the trouble with poets falling in love. Everything we say to each other becomes our poetry. 😂
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LOL Yeah, that is so true. You have me glowing.
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GREAT STORY POEM—I LIKE HAPPY ENDINGS, DON’T YOU? 🙂
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Yes, I do.too. Thank you John. That was really quick.of you. Thanks so much.
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Doing some late night work…and there it was! 🙂
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Thanks. Don’t work too hard.
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NAAAAA! I got me a curfew. 🙂
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Cool
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Such a delightful read!
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Thank you MVS. I appreciate that.
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This is lovely! Your words are stunning.
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You are very kind. Thank you for taking the time out to read and comment. Appreciate it.
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Pretty and romantic. Lucky woman.
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You made me smile. Thank you so much for the read and your sweet words.
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You’re most welcome 🙂
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mandibelle16, perfectly said! thelonelyauthorblog, perfectly lovely 🙂
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Thanks so much. Appreciate that.
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Thank you 🙂
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Hmmmm. Tubularsock prefers Coke to Pepsi and TIDE for a whiter white. Ok, did Tubularsock miss something?
Wonderful work!
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LMFAO I usually save the Coke to remove the paint from my car. Thanks for stopping by. lol
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Beautiful…
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You are so sweet. Thank you.
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Beautifully spell
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Thank you Lity. I appreciate it.
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Last two lines really says it all❤️
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Ortensia, there are people with the ability to make you feel cleansed by their words. I had a recent experience like that, thus, this prompt was easy to fulfill. Thank you for your kind words. Happy you appreciated it.
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Beautiful
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Thank you so much.
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What a beautiful sensual bath of words. Definitely cleansing. 💙
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Love the way you described it Miriam. Happy you appreciated it. Thank you.
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You’re very welcome ❤️
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Well, Andrew, I’ve always hated baths and much preferred to shower, but I think I just changed my mind. No, no, that isn’t right – YOU just changed my mind.
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Haha Sharon, the poet wasn’t even in the bath. Your words really make me happy. Thank you for that and for your wonderful support.
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the poet wasn’t even in the bath –
Don’t ruin it for me
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Lol. Thanks
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Your words bring to live the image, making it a real moment, quite stunningly.
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Thank you my friend. You are always generous with your words. Thank you.
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Most magical
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Delighted that you think so Derrick. Thanks.
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“My beloved took a bath
It was me that she cleansed.”
Magic. Your words are magic. 🌟💫
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You make me so happy. Thank you so much for your words. You always motivate me.
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Awwww That’s awesome! Knowing that you received my good vibes straight from my heart to yours — made my day! ☀️💛
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You always deliver good vibes. Happy to make you smile. Thanks
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Hard to say anything more meaningful than your Mentor and Muse, so I will just say lovely.
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You made me smile so hard. Thank you so much.
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Mmmmh nothing like a long hot bath…lovely indeed!
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Happy you enjoyed this. Thank you for your words and the read.
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Its such a pleasure reading your work…you’ve got a beautiful way with words.
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You are making me blush. Thank you for your kind words. I do appreciate them. Thanks.
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This is really nice. You play wonderfully with words.
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You made me so happy with your words. Thank you for reading and for the kindness in your words. I appreciate that.
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The imagery here is breathtaking! Andrew, you’re a wordsmith and one of the best I’ve ever had the pleasure of reading.
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Diana, your words truly humble me. I don’t know what to sat. Thank you so much for your kindness and support.
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You’re welcome and I’ll always support you. 😃
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Thanks
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Exquisitely expressed with words that tantalize and tease and breathe and weave a story that is so boldly yet softly spoken. Your Talent is phenomenal! Now where do I find a man like this one? Brava!! 👏🏼👏🏼👏🏼
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You are making me stutter and blush. You are so very kind. Thank you for your amazing words. They added sunshine to my day. Thank you so much. I really appreciate it.
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When I read words like yours, I’m just taken away by the Talent that is before me. I hope you know, really KNOW, how Gifted you are. Not everyone can put words together like you can. And yes I know what a sincere thank you and compliment means. 😘
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You are too kind. I am speechless. Thank you.
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Your poet’s snare caught these lines perfectly. It reads even better the second, third…..time.
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You are very kind. Thank you for saying that. It is very much appreciated.
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My pleasure.
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You create quite a moment. I do like, ‘Words floated like translucent bubbles’, quite lovely.
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You are very generous with your compliments. Happy you enjoyed. Thank you. I am very grateful.
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not generous, honest.
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Thank you.
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beautiful words, beautiful.
also, what a pic!
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Appreciate your comments. Happy that you liked this poem. Thank you so much,
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Splendid work with lovely use of imagery
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That is so kind of you to say. Thank you.
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I cannot think of anything new to add! That’s what happens when you come late to the party, lol. Where do you find these sumptuous pictures?
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LOL I spend quite a bit of tie searching through Google, This was from a prompt, so it was given to me. Thank you Diane.
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Wow! I like how your words seem to flow and cascade into one another Andrew! I also like that tub! Unlike most guys,
I prefer to spend time relaxing in a nice hot bath instead of standing in a invigorating shower. But, sorry, I don’t read poetry in the tub.
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I usually shower, but every so often I do like to lay in the tub with soft music in the background.
Thank you for the compliments. Do appreciate them. Thanks.
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a stunning poem! I love the atmosphere, and the end is fantastic: “It was me that she cleansed”
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Very happy you appreciated it. Thank you so much for your comments. That line was the first line I wrote for this poem. It inspired the rest. Thank you.
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I can see that. Also plenty of beautiful imagery between the first and the last line. Again stunning!
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Aaaw thanks. Really makes me happy.
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I am happy to add a flower to your springtime!
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Thanks. I need it. It has been a sucky day. Thank you.
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Don’t let a suck day to ruin your spring!
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Oh I Spring back quick. Never stay down for very long. Thanks.
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This is simply GORGEOUS.
And this sounds like a plan:
Feasting on Pepsi, popcorn, and poetry
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A simple plan, but so wonderful. Thank you so much for reading and for your words.
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And pic to accompany 🙂
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Thank you.
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Reblogged this on Die Erste Eslarner Zeitung – Aus und über Eslarn, sowie die bayerisch-tschechische Region!.
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Thank you so much for sharing. I appreciate it.
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Wow. This is gorgeous. What a beautiful poem and mesmerizing metaphor. Loved it!
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Delighted that you think so. Thank you so much for your kind words.
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Wonderful imagery. I love the way that she was in the water, but he was cleansed. An awesome play on love.
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You made me very happy with your words. So happy that you appreciated it. Thank you so much for taking the time out to read and leave such great comments. I appreciate it.
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I always find it interesting when a comment comes out of the clear blue that hits us in a special way.
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Smiling. Thank you for your great words and support.
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WOW. All I can say is if I had a man reading me poetry while I took a bath, it wouldn’t be long before he (and the book) were soaking wet. LOL Great write Drew.
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Haha Pleased you enjoyed this Linda. I know everyone is focusing on this poet who is about to read this poetry, but this is really about the magical siren who can make him feel so many things with her words. To the point of cleansing him.
Thank you for your wonderful words and support. I so appreciate it
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You have used wonderful descriptions. Another brilliant piece and that last line is really powerful. 🙂
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Your kind words made me smile. Thank you so much for your kind words, your support, and the positive vibes you leave here every time you visit. I appreciate that so much.
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You’re welcome! Always happy to read your work 🙂
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Reblogged this on johncoyote and commented:
please read the amazing poetry by a talented writer.
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This is poetry. I enjoyed this one.
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Thank you so much for sharing it. Happy that you liked it.
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I liked the three new new poem. All were wonderful and you are welcome my friend.
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You are so cool. Thanks
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Beautiful words! And I love the beautiful scene you created 😍
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Happy that you liked it Winnie. Thank you so much for your kind words. Appreciate them.
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It’s always a pleasure, Andrew 😉
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Thanks for saying that. I am having a stressful evening. So it very nice to hear that.
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Oh, I hope everything will be okay soon. I’m sending you a beautiful sunny day morning greeting from our country 🌞.
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Thank you so much for your positive vibes. They are needed. Thanks.
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You’re welcome
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Beautiful! Thank you for sharing!!
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Happy you think so. Thank you so much.
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Beautiful poem 💕💕💕
Greetings from the beautiful Rhine-Highlands / Germany
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Greeting from New York City. Happy that you liked me poem. Thank you for your kind words.
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Wow! Great way to tell a story in a small amount of words. Romantic and meaningful, Drew. 💕 💮
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Thank you so much Robin. I appreciate the read and kind words. Thanks.
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Perfect
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Delighted that you think so. Thank you.
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Some bath! 😉
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LOL Thanks so much for reading.
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BEAUTIFUL!
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So happy that you think so. Thank you so much.
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